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The IELTS Writing Task 2 introduction causes a lot of controversy. Many teachers recommend that you simply rewrite the question in your own words.
Although this has some benefits because it is very easy to do, I believe that it will not help you get a Band 7+ score and I will outline my reasons below.
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Here is what I see many teachers recommend as a ‘magic’ formula for writing the introduction:
1) Neutral background statement:
[Any topic] is a controversial issue.
2) Paraphrase/rewrite the question.
[Some people think X while others think Y].
3) Say what the essay will do:
‘This essay will…’
While this ‘template’ is a useful guide for people who are just starting to develop their IELTS writing skills, it may not be the best option if you are aiming for a higher score (Band 7+).
The 3-sentence template introduction is a clear and safe way to start an essay.
But it has some drawbacks.
Look at the question below.
‘Some people say that cars are the best way of travelling around cities while others think that bicycles are better’. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Now look at a student’s response. Can you see what the problem is?
‘Cars and buses are a topic of heated discussion. Some individuals argue that motor vehicles are the best way of getting around cities, but others believe that travelling by bus is better. This essay will discuss both sides and give my opinion.’
It simply repeats the question, uses mostly memorised language, tells the examiner what they already know and does not show the writer’s opinion.
It tells the examiner that you rely on templates because you don’t have enough of your own language.
Of course, if you then go on to write some excellent main body paragraphs, the introduction is not the most important part of the essay.
But the introduction IS important for making a good first impression.
Look at the student’s example below. What is the problem here?
‘The optimum method of meandering in a metropolis is a debatable issue. Some people promote four-wheeled automobiles, but other people utilise two-wheelers. This essay will discuss both sides.’
The language here is very unnatural.
Synonyms are rarely exact synonyms, so if you simply replace words with similar words, your language will sound unnatural.
Paraphrasing is a skill which many high-level writers struggle with, even at University.
Unless you are very good at paraphrasing, I would not recommend this strategy.
Your job is to ANSWER the question, not to repeat it.
Examiners mark large quantities of the same essay – they do not need to read the question over and over again. They want to see what you can do with language.
The best way to write an outstanding introduction is to address the question very specifically.
Look at the example below (in favour of cars) – what do you notice?
‘Modern cities suffer from several problems related to car use, and recently many people have suggested that bicycles are a better option for travelling around congested town centres. However, getting around by bike has some drawbacks. This essay will argue that despite the many health and environmental benefits to cycling, cars are far more practical and convenient for most situations.’
In this example, the student
It still follows the 3-sentence system:
Remember:
This 3-sentence structure can be used to address any question, and it relates more closely to what you will argue in the main body paragraphs.
The example below shows how you can still use the 3-sentence structure to answer any question (this example is in favour of bicycles).
Modern cities suffer from several problems related to car use, because many people choose cars over bicycles as the most practical and convenient means of transport. However, people are beginning to realise that bicycles are a far better option for travelling around congested town centres, for both environmental and financial reasons. This essay will argue that more should be done to encourage this positive development.
Most of the IELTS experts that I consider to be trustworthy agree with me.
Here you can see what David Willis of TED IELTS saying exactly the same thing in his article Paraphrasing in IELTS.
David states the main disadvantages as:
To see more examples of how to paraphrase the question effectively, I would strongly recommend this video from Oxford Online English (watch from 09.13).
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Hi Nguyễn Trung Hiếu
That’s a lot of questions! Perhaps you’d like to book a coaching hour with me or join the Academy where we have regular Q&A sessions.
Best wishes
Fiona
Dear Ms. Fiona, I want to ask you some questions about IELTS Writing.
1. One problem I faced when a person said to me “You can find contradictions in both different dictionaries and English professors. That is why English is both an art and a science” This statement give me a scenario that show the unclearliness to evaluate which languages is formal or informal, OR which ones is suitable for IELTS Writing for IELTS Speaking. Can it suffer IELTS Candidate’s score in IELTS Speaking and Writing?
* Further one I see is related to the usage of ‘proverbs’ and ‘rhetorical questions’ in IELTS Writing Task 1 (even in writing models of some IELTS real reliable expert and ex-examiner)
Example to clarify my problem
– First example with the usage of “Art washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life” – a proverb
“However, the look of the building is also important because of the role of art in everyday life. Architecture is often considered one of the original and purest forms of artistic expression. I am reminded of a quote from Pablo Picasso who said ‘Art washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life.’ Imagine a city filled with ugly, utilitarian structures like many Soviet-era buildings. These buildings will not lift people’s spirits or encourage them to contemplate the intended message. Contrast this with a city where architects have been given free rein to be artists. As long as the buildings are also functional, you will find a city filled with beauty and provocation that enhances life for its inhabitants. The outward appearance does not have to be beautiful, but it has a responsibility to contribute something to enrich the lives of everyday people.”
(This text is derived from a sample answer of former examiner)
– Second example with rhetorical questions
“In some types of work, qualifications are less important. With manual jobs, such as cleaning and laboring, there is very little theoretical knowledge required. Thus, employers are more likely to seek people with a good working knowledge of the job and what it entails. However, even in these jobs it is important for people to have a minimum level of education, especially if they want to rise above the lowest working level. How can a person without good writing and mathematical skills balance a budget, or deal with legal or safety issues? Therefore, qualifications matter even in more practical types of work.”
(This text is from a model answer of an IELTS test writer)
2. I have some questions about your Members Academy.
– You mentioned when attending your academy, I can 2-minute speaking recording every week to hand in to receive your feedback. It’s similar to 8 x Fiona’s Speaking & Pronunciation Analysis and Correction, isn’t it? If yes, do you offer feedback and correction about a member’s IELTS Speaking full test (15-minute test) to give an estimated score.
– If becoming a member of Coaching & Course, in addition to fixed courses you give, can I access any new lessons or new practices every week?
– Do you offer any live lessons about IELTS Writing or Speaking? I always know more about it?
– Can I ask you the extra costs if I want to receive more Writing feedbacks besides 8 fixed full writing tasks in Members Academy?
My questions are too long, but I really hope you will answer them. I look forward to seeing your answer.
Yours Sincerely,